Talk:Apocalypse Life/Issue 28/@comment-26217707-20130518002459

Ok, finally decided to sit and write my long ass comment.

I think, with this issue, you have solidfied yourself (in my mind, at least) as the best writer, in terms of prose writing, on the wiki. Bro, what you're doing here is writing a 3,500 word issue, just two people in a car, that's it, and I find myself not able to stop reading and not wanting it to end because you do dialogue and description that well. Like, you develop Nina and Julius' characters and friendship so awesomely, but there's no action, no zombies, yet it doesn't feel tedious. And the dialogue flows so well, and you interject it with little bits of their thoughts and some description that makes it work even better. I also love all the little things you describe, like the ocean and the beach that catch Julius' eye, and all the stuff in the car like the glove compartment and its contents that give Nina an idea of who owned it. Little things like that enhance the story, but you manage to not overdo it, which is extremely irritating to me as a reader. Your description has purpose, and that's what I appreciate.

What else, what else....oh, and you ended the issue on a great part. Not the usual cliche cliffhanger where it seems like someone is gonna die or there's a herd of zombies. I really want to know what Julius' thoughts will be about Alice, what he loves most about her, if he's ready to even talk about it. Ok, I could explain every little thing I liked (building Nina/Julius' possible brother/sister relationship, their natural bond over music and their funny quips at each other), but this will go on longer than I should. You already know I think it was fantastic writing overall. I'm gonna try to get at least portions of my writing near this level and come back to this if I need inspiration.

Btw, if this whole Alice venture doesn't work out, Nina and Julius 4eva. <3 I don't even care she like boobs; Julius gonna show her he ain't no pig, but a real man!