Talk:Writing Contest 2/RelicRaider/@comment-8483090-20141110000923

Yo, yo, yo. So I wrote a comment yesterday, I swear, but I guess it didn't go through T___T. So here it iz.

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So, I gotta admitt, for your first written thing on here (I believe so), the detail was astonishing. It was all detailed, and I could picture the scenes in my head. Now, the story was good, showing Jill's confidence step up. However, it was a little short and left me wanting more, espically when it came to Jill's character. You showed off that she was kid really well, but I was hoping to see a little more of her. Still, like I said, the detail was really good.