Talk:Step by Step/Issue 1/@comment-4105222-20140316171746

Hello zed, and helo AJ.

You can say I'm a copycat, but you can also say I was waiting for someone like you to comment. Thing is, I've always wanted to read this story... and today I happen to be committing to the wiki since I'm gonna try to resume writing again. It most certainly wasn't timing... I guess seeing you comment encouraged me even more to read this story. Without it, I probably would've taken even longer to actually start reading this story.

But... wow, that paragraph above isn't about the story at all! Great start, me. I just wanted to clarify my copycatting tendencies Zed, and I apologize for taking up some space to do that. It's the only way I know how.

Onto the issue itself. I've read many a snippet of your writing, and just from the lines alone, I knew you could write extremely well. When I finally read this whole issue, I got like, a whole dinner plate of that. You didn't disappoint with each line since you clearly showed you can write well. The detail... the detail is something I'd read out of a book. As in, it was pretty vivid in a vague sense. You do well writing in professional book style form and that's one of the biggest hooks that immersed me into this tale.

Saying that, we move onto the characters. It was two different sides, one Lyle and one Joseph. Civilian, then military. Throughout this development we also get a sense of the apocalypse continuing, then unfolding, then unfolding... okay, I enjoyed the two different sides, but I struggled to follow the flow. As in I had a bit of trouble with the transition. Am I reading about pre, or post, or... but really, it might not even be your fault, since I'm a little sleep-deprived here and I'm just trying to warm up. It certainly didn't hold back the poetic, metaphoric way you presented the imagery, so that's what I focused on. Again, line after line, it stayed consisted. I really felt where the characters were standing on, the things they were holding, whatnot. I hope you get me.

All in all, great start. Amazing start. I'll be keeping an eye out. I can use some reading to get back into this writing business and you've provided some good material.