Talk:The Bowl/Issue 4/@comment-5415500-20131008193830

The storyline of this issue was great. But, to be honest, it wasn't the best. I'm sorry but you need to learn some stuff.
 * Start a new line when a different character speaks.
 * Every single paragraph is one sentence altogether. Remember to split them up into sentences.
 * Its hard to read also, but I think splitting it up would make it better.

I'm sorry if this makes me sound like a dick, I just want this story to succeed.