Thread:KnowledgeProspector/@comment-26059793-20140922111431/@comment-4105222-20140923040535

Hola, Jake. I've given Issue 1 a read. I liked the premise; just thinking of Tom Cruise made me imagine the whole apocalyptic scene as a futuristic setting, like most of his movies have been lately. Since the actors are well-known they're fairly easy to visualize in the story. :P There's also a hollywood thing going on here, until the introduction of Eisenberg O_O He sounds awfully familiar, like a Walter White going on super-saiyan mode.

What held the story back for me, though, is the grammar. Sentences were unclear most of the time because of how they were structured. You can improve this by continuing to write, and reading books or articles online; things that are published tend to have polished grammar. Also, checking your work for errors goes a long way.