User blog:Mr Volcy/Review my story - make suggestions!

Hey everyone, I've been enjoying reading all your stories and commenting on them. I've just begun adding my story and any reviews and suggestions would be appreciated. Let me know what you think of the characters, the plot, the structure of the story and any suggestions you would like to add.

Unfortunately, I can't ask for any new characters at the moment. I have too much already as all the characters are based off of friends of mine. As soon as I start killing some off, character suggestions will come. Thanks for reading and enjoy. Here's my story; Dead In The Street. Read from prologue to chapter 3 and enjoy!

Thanks everyone.