Talk:Writing Contest 1/Fitz0021/@comment-4105222-20130524095514

Like what Fitz says, this was really awesome. I liked that you revealed more about her relationship with T-Dog. And the Stokes crossover, too. Though I pictured him as white for some reason...

Anyway, it was well-written all throughout, save for a few parts. I know what you're trying to say, but the message wasn't clear. Nonetheless, it did present some really good content, and it added a ton of dimension to Jacqui's already awesome character. It was sad, reading the end, learning that this was all just a memory... you did good on making it touching. Keep it up, Fitz.