Talk:Life Will End/Chapter 1/@comment-26217707-20131223003330

Very, very impressive first chapter Mage! On a basic note, the writing was pretty spot on through and through, and you've definitely got skill in that regard (seriously, writing like this this young is extreeeeemely impressive, dude). The action was pretty cool as well, especially that whole part with Zach. Just from this issue, I have to say Melanie actually stood out to me the most, just from her background with computers. That's a very interesting choice, and I'd like to see it come into play in the future. Mick is also a cool protagonist, judging from the info we got at the end. All in all, a pretty ace pilot. Will be keeping up.