Talk:A Long Road to Fortune/Issue 16/@comment-4105222-20131016185015

Oh my jayzus, that heart-warming introduction.... I can't even handle it. Yargh. The descriptions alone are perfect... it was well-pulled off. That father and daughter is so adorable together. And the way you transitioned... "Chet." That's where he got it from. From Anna. A simple, yet important background for his name.

Ahhhhhhh, then you throw me off with the actual part. Might I just note now that the spacing makes it a little bit easier to read. From the salutations to the meeting of Bristol, this was pretty damn crazy. But what's got me going nuts is that last part. I was thinking Yuri and Francisco are nothing but nobody-henchmen when suddenly, I learn a little bit more about them.... gaaaaaaah. Save her, Ashton! Then you couple this with Liza's bloodlust and evident love for Ashton. Touche, PBR. You've thrown me off real good.