Talk:Writing Contest 1/ Olivia253/@comment-4105222-20130524095937

This had a different style from the other entries... it was pretty cool seeing this kind of commentary on her life. Made me feel a bit cheery myself.

Though the shift from the outbreak was a bit rough. I felt that you sped through most, if not all of it too quickly, so I found it hard to sympathize with them upon their death. Not only that, but the last sentence was also a quick jump. So yeah, just had a bit of trouble with the cohesiveness of the ending part.

Nonetheless, you captured Beth's character pretty well on this entry, and that's what matters.