User blog comment:PBR Sharpshoot/A Long Road to Fortune: Opinions, Things that should change/@comment-26217707-20130129233615/@comment-5935579-20130130020344


 * I'll make a note of the dialogue. I didn't know I was doing it wrong this entire time.


 * To be honest, I didn't find anything wrong with Ashton talking to himself as I was writing the issue. But now I see what you mean, and I agree. I'll make him think more instead.


 * Noted. I focused on the dialogue a lot and didn't notice how lacking the imagery was.


 * Yeah, some of them manage to slip through me.

I'll work your suggestions into the next Volume. Thanks again for the feedback and I hope to not disappoint you!