Talk:World of Anarchy/Chapter 3/@comment-8483090-20140625233046

yo, yo, yo, yo bro. So I just read the first three chapters + prologue and figured i'd throw some feedback in.

One thing I like to say, I believe Aj said this a few issues back, that I'm glad we got the time to know David, since quite a few stories throw chars at you, including me; but, you took the opposite approach and focused on pretty much David and Teresa so far, and the newby Chris. Now, back onto David, he seems really intresting because something bad definitly happened to him in his childhood. You throw around hints that give us ideas but never confirm them and that is great, you really got a knack for foreshadowing. But yeah I definitlty can't wait to see what's the deal with David because he seems pretty troubled currently, and while you didn't go too deep into it, I liked the relationship between David and Jim (i was dying when that gurl called them gay lmao).

Now onto Teresa, she is definitly has contrast to David. She's more innocent and hasn't been through shit like David, and that is visible in most of the dialouge and their interactions. We haven't got much into her yet but seeing as she is the duter, i'm intrested to see more of her. I can see a type of relationship where she's the one person keeping David's humanity.

I can't say much about Chris yet but dat ending D: Intrested to see his relationship with David/Teresa after dat.

Now onto the general plot, you got it going good. If the outbreak were realistic there would be hella chaos like we're seeing here. Reminds me a bit of the prologue in The Last of Us.

Now onto any critisms, i don't have a lot. I'll start with one, and it's critism at all just more of a tip. You might wanna put thoughts in italics, i mean you don't have too, but it's something I personally think makes more sense because we see his thoughts a lot and someone might get it mixed up with dialouge idk :P Speaking of dialogue it's not bad at all but it could be better, and don't take that as bad thing at all, since dialouge is hella hard for everybody, so it's just a general thing and doesn't take away from my enjoyment at all. Overral, I'm enjoying the story man and I'll keep up reading