Talk:Extinction/Chapter 1/@comment-5910587-20150713064639

oh yeah oh yeah i been waitin for this i been READY

okay so i remember reading the first issue of the original extinction. And it makes me so happy to see how much you've improved Danny. Without a doubt you are one of the most improved writers on the wiki and one of the best (and also one of the most productive :D).

I LOVE I Am Legend so I loved the reference you added with Conner and his mannequin friends. The intro in general was really well done and it really showed that your writing has an interesting voice/narration, if that makes sense. I feel like my writing style can get kind of....plain? but you (and PBR also does this well) have a narrator with a distinct voice that makes your stuff really fun to read.

So the star of the issue -- Ms. Whiskers of course omg why did you do her like that D: D: D: okay just kidding, lets get to the true star. The infamous Conner Kilderry. I never hated Conner in the original Extinction, he was just kind of an ass and that's okay. So far, I really, REALLY like this Conner. He has a some humanity to him (like when he felt bad for eating Whiskers) but I'm also sure he's gonna do some fucked up FUCKED UP FUCKED UP shit to survive later on in the story. I think he has the potential to be a really grey character -- I think some people are really gonna like him and some people are really gonna hate him. If that's the route you wanna take with him, I think you can pull it off. A lot of protagonists are too clearly "THE HERO" or just plain douchebags, so if you can manage to make Conner a truly morally ambiguous character (and I think you can) that would be quite a feat.

ALSO this issue was like, genuinely creepy. The demonic descriptions of Conner's ghost family were super eerie and I hope they don't take Conner to the other realm omg. But yeah, I really liked how you handled the hallucinations and it was a really nice touch when Ms Whiskers was a ghost the next time he saw them.

Anyways this lived up to my expectations greatly and you managed to make a decent sized issue with 1 character amazingly engaging. GOOD JOB DANNY but i definitely didn't expect anything less :)