Talk:The Sewers/Issue 1/@comment-1858970-20120903234224

Awesome, I think you should try to describe things more or write something in a different way than what you have afterwards, one sentence as an example.

"He is sitting, leaning, up the wall of the sewer, trying to get some sleep while the others secures the area."

Could be written like this:

"He sat, leaning against the the cold concrete wall of a tunnel within the sewer as he tried without avail to sleep while others from his group attempted to secure the area."

It's good nonetheless though.