User blog comment:Daryl Maylam/I Need Some Pointers/@comment-4770929-20150607235104

I've just read the first two parts. I feel that if you described the settings and scenery, it would feel more "alive" and interesting.

It's a tricky thing to do to write a story that only has two characters, especially when one of them is a dog. I think that it's pretty good so far, but it needs descriptions.

Hope I helped :)