Thread:Thesaboteur7/@comment-23785492-20150821193510

Okay Sab so I was looking through your audition again, you know to make sure everything was all good. <3

One of the things is that I was curious as to whether you might have wanted to pick a different last name for your character, because I had another auditioned character with the first name Barret (which is the same as Amelia's last name except with an extra t. xD) which I personally don't mind but I thought I should bring this to your attention in case you might like to change it.

Another thing that I wanted to ask of you is whether you could expand on her relationships with the people you mentionned, like how she got along with them I mean. Like what I done with the other auditioned character in the end is basically I added some parts to everything to make them fit the story while also keeping it similar to the audition. So basically what i'd like from you is some minor details of how she was with them so then I can expand it a little myself. (Unless if of coarse you wanted to just write around a paragraph of each one then you've done the work. <3 lmao)

I was also curious as to whether you could possibly, as long as you don't mind, write a little bit more with personality? it was good at the start but then it kinda went off into talking about a "fling" which more so belongs in the relationships section if you get what I mean? Again all these modifcations are only if you want to but if you could expand some on the personality and the relationships that would be easier for me to not only write them but do her profile as well.

Background is pretty much okay although I did change what I wanted for my background so people can put like, three paragraphs worth SO if you would like to expand on your character, give her some more backstory from before the infection etc then please feel free to do so, otherwise I can work with what I have been given already. :P

Other than them mentions, your character is pretty a-okay to go. Of coarse I won't write up her profile until you've decided on what I have told you here and if you do decide you'd like to expand on some things then may I ask you to kinda do a repeat of the whole set up in a comment below this one?

Aka write it all like you was auditoning the whole character again. Because of the differences and stuff it would make it easier for me to look back at if you could just write it all up again in the comment below. As long as you want to though. Don't force yourself. <3 