Talk:Anguish & Desire/Chapter Five/@comment-23785492-20170603194901

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Okay waddup its yo boi here with his fifth comment of Anguish??? What??? As a note, I'm eventually going to run out of ways to introduce this comment since I still have 25 chapters to read after this omg. Problem for another comment though!

Lmao that opening was perf. We got embarrassing cuddles, a deadly mercenary taking part in typical girl shenanigans and a guy that is too tired to care, I love it.

And of course it is ruined quickly by MonoMech's motives. Why he do dis. ;-;

"I'm a model for murder!" Fitz, pls, I swear, dont u do it. DO NOT. She needs to live forever and be pure.

Nvm Yuka is trying to steal Ken from Kito and I do not appreciate this, is she pretending to be innocent and is actually a murdering boyfriend stealer? I can see it, I should've known she was to pure. D:<

Lmao I'm feeling the complete opposite of that last statement, I'm becoming paranoid. Everyone is going to kill everyone and I'm going to be sad so fml.

Anyway this chapter was really good, it's setting it up in a nice way, we got a party about to happen that sounds suspect and we have everybody's families/significant others (at least I assume everyone's) threatened, great! One thing I will say though is that, like the previous chapter with the girl's sleepover, I wish we could see everyone's reactions to watching the tapes/refusing to watch the tapes. I don't know, I feel like that's just because my style of writing would totally jump on that whereas yours is Ken's POV, either way it's fine, would just add some good dramatics, you do you though boo.

On the subject of characters, my opinion still isn't really changing and unless if something big changes (like a murder D:<) that won't change since everyone is either my faves or likable. Two things to note though, I'm getting yandere vibes from Nakata, either that or she's drunk, and I finally remembered who the trio of Obi-Wan and Mio remind me of, Malfoy and that chick who crushed on him in Harry Potter, I am getting way too many similar vibes from that lol but at least Mio seems less of a bitch than the chick.

I do get a feeling my opinions will soon change again though, we've got the motives, we've got the split of the people trying to be upbeat and the ones preparing for the fall but I KNOW at least one of them who are trying to keep people upbeat (especially looking at them song people) is going to be one of the first to commit a murder. It's going to happen. Obi-Wan is too obvious to do it and I feel like he's more endgame antagonist, ever him or Naka lmao.

I also do have one theory and that is there is another group of kids going through the same thing (at least one other) in another part of the school because it feels like they are locked off from some of the school building, maybe I'm wrong though.

I'm also really curious what would happen if someone killed MonoMech? I assume it's not really possible since he is a robot and apparently has done this before but like if someone did it, could the rest of them go through a trial to kill that person and then they're free to go? Probably not but it is an interesting thought.

Overall, a nice chapter, I honestly feel like it could've been better with seeing the POV's of the others with their tapes but you still done a nice job showing their reactions anyway so it's probably just my style of writing that is causing me to react like that and I'm officially ready for heartbreak. Is Chie finally dying next chapter? Probably, you heartless meanie. D:<

P.S. The characters are starting to get more and more focus a bit, especially Tomori so that's good. Probably preparing for dramatic tragedy though so that's not as good.