Talk:Step by Step/Issue 1/@comment-26217707-20140316145255

Time to comment on this ish

I'd read this once before and really enjoyed it, but decided to give it another read as I thought it deserved a comment. So I'll stop being lazy, and comment.

The first time I read it, that beginning scene with Lyle and Nolan wasn't there, but overall, I think it was a nice addition. It certainly contrasts to the soldiers' predicament later on in the issue, as it's much more calm, laid-back. The dialogue in that section was pretty strong, too. Then again, I felt like it was a little out of place, given that the majority of the issue is focusing on the soldiers and here in the beginning we get these two guys we end up not learning any more about later on in the issue.

Then we got the action-y soldier stuff, oh God. Seriously, your descriptions here were very unique. I've never seen a long zombie scene like that with such great imagery that doesn't manage to get repetitive, because of all these really raw and detailed descriptions you give. From the top of my head I remember the blood bubbling on her back, brain matter snowballing in the air....Gross--which is a good thing. Overall, your writing is really strong, your voice and still clear from the first issue. Your writing just really stands out with its creativity and descriptions.

Next, character stuff. Brock, I think it's clear, is the stand out, beginning from his rescue of Joseph. He certainly has a take charge attitude, very commonplace for these military guys, but you've also managed to humanize him 1) with the family stuff ("Mary and the kids...") and 2) his questioning of how this started, why is this all happening. Subtle additions that make him stand out from a standard military leader. Then you have Joseph, who was this unname soldier we were following, fighting off these motherfuckin zombs. He gives off a very amateurish vibe to me, like he could be a new guy (or maybe its just the stress of fighting off zombs that gave me this impression). Sort of a young guy with a lot of room to grow. He interested me immediately, but I'm not sure why. You also have Gordon and Alexander. Alexander stood out just because of his technician background, so I'm eager to see how he fits in.

Forgot to say this, but starting the action from the POV of thst crawling woman was very cool, getting into her head and everything.

But yeah, that's all I have to say. Very, very strong first issue that uses action to full effect, effectively getting me hooked. From the little I saw, you're strong in other areas, too (dialogue, characters), so we'll see how Step By Step progresses. :D Great job, Zed.

(Please excuse typos, on my phone af)