Talk:A Long Road to Fortune/Issue 29/@comment-4105222-20140209121228

I've re-read this again and dang... I wish I'd have commented on it the first time around. Why? So my reaction is more concentrated, real. Because this issue was freakin' amazing.

This was the issue of Ashton's first step to adventure... to explore himself. I can really see his growth as a person just from doing this... heeding the wise words of Mr. Chet and taking action with it. For that, and for him to do it at the night of his crossover to manhood, is nothing but good timing. The plot points aligned to this and you've done it masterfully, PBR.

I thought Ashton's adventure was the icing on the cake until I kept on reading... the reactions, Liza, Mimi, and Valdez, were spot-on. Spot-on. I seriously felt their reactions just from the text because dayum son, you wrote it well. And what good time to show Liza's badassery with this. I can somewhat sense this'll do her bad in the future somehow...

Last, but certainly not least, the ending. You remind us Saul isn't, wasn't the only worst threat they'll have to face... there will be worse to come. Can I wait? Nah, I'm finding it a little difficult. So I'm gonna go on.