Talk:A Long Road to Fortune/Issue 21/@comment-4105222-20131110104535

Wow #2. Seriously. Just... wow. Bravo.

This was.... this was amazing. It was a mix of action and drama, all tied up with some really, really good writing. I found myself all over the place with the fighting, then the talking, then the fighting again... and it was all written very well--at best right now, I'm mostly lost for words.

I can say that most everything stuck to me. I'm not surprised that Mr. Chet's a badass, so I was more focused on Pepe here, whom is getting a shining moment especially since you just casted him. Better watch out, Mario. You might have a little bit of competition here.

Then there was Ashton's chase with the cartel man, then Sandra's kill, which was well-written by the way. Really, each and every character here gets a chance to shine. And that leads me to Francisco and Yuri's interaction.

Definitely what I didn't expect. It was all leading up to that moment, yet... Yuri pretty much said "no." Or "some other time maybe." I was rooting for Franciso and I'd have thought he won her already but... dang. Gut-punched.

I'm still a bit lost, you can see. So I'ma skip over to Liza. Liza, and her complete transformation. Even though her section's so short, it's still very important. She isn't much of a psycho but a .... different girl now. Just different. Ashton, Ashton... you must and I repeat you must give more attention to your childhood friend. And kiss her. And do the normal thing y'all teenagers love to do.