Talk:Dead Weight/Issue 1/@comment-6884918-20131214212853

First of all, welcome to the wiki, glad to see you made a story. Always love to have a new member.

Now for your story. It's interesting, to say the least. How in a few minutes his safehouse was taken away from him, that's very interesting. We also see a variety of characters, all kind of different. That's nice too.

If there's one problem I have, it's that it's not really clear what's going on all the time. It's nice to see Andy feel sadness, but then, randomly, a girl pops up and takes him with her. It seems kind of odd. Maybe you're going to expand this, I don't know.

I like Flake's part. I assume he's the leader of the camp, not really sure. But I like how he's violent like that, not afraid to kill. Definately waiting to see what you're going to do with him.