Talk:Eden Rising/Episode 3/@comment-4105222-20130822032400

JOHN!

Finally got around to reading this script on my way home. Found a good time to read now (hehe)! I'ma level with you; this comment is loooooooooong overdue, because I remember reading and stopping at this episode. So some stuff from the other scripts might carry over to this comment.

What I didn't get to say on the other scripts were that I somehow found the length to be a problem. I usually like to read things in one sitting, and the length kept me wanting to get up and do something else...

But really, I tried to treat those first two scripts as two-hour long, no-commercial break episodes, so that's what got me through. That, and I wasn't particularly comfortable at where I was reading (was outside with people walking around; I was on a bench)... so I guess it's mostly just me.

Now, onto the meat itself. Like I said before, what you have here is damn solid. Solid. Very well-written, complete, just enough details to get immersed. Oh, and immersion. The script format really helps, like a lot. I can see why you write this way. It's what helped me get hooked into this even more.

Episode 3! The episode I didn't really critique. First, the length is finally manageable! I was able to breathe. :P And yet, you still manage to establish each and every character we know; seriously, I feel like I know the mainies super duper well after just 3 episodes. I am going to religiously fanboy Kelvin for now. I know there'll be tons more along the way but... yeah, Kelvin and his papa Javier are my faves.

And as for the ending.... the way it was written was quite chilly. Like I really felt I was thrown into a battleground when Declan ducked down on that booth. And also, Bonnie's dialogue. Spot on! I totes heard Mila Kunis talking while she did.

Off to read the rest; I'll comment on what I can. :)