User blog:Rick123Axel/Rick123Axel's Story Reviews!

Hey guys, this is going to be an ongoing blog that I update frequently so be sure to keep an eye on it. I'll be honsetly reviewing many stories  by episode/issue. Feel free to comment your stories in the comments so I can check them out also feel free to check out and comment on my story The Undead. Thanks and hopefully enjoy, more to come soon! :)

Please don't been insulted if any negative comments are made, if you are then I sincerely apologize but these are my opinions.

Story
Okay, I found it very interesting to start the story on such an intense, action packed scene. I found that although I could imagine Jessica and Robbie trying to escape I found it very hard to imagine who else was with them due to them not being mentioned. A character says "Mummy!" and I was very confused to who's child this was, Jessica's? Robbie's? Another Survivor's? I love how you have left Jessica's fate unknown as this is not only very realistic but means you can eventually potentially bring her back, which would be awesome if done correctly or you can have a sad undead reunion either way if done well will be awesome. Another thing that I didn't fully understand was that Sally met Robbie outside the remains of his camp but later she seems to be called Amy, am I misunderstanding or is a typo either way it is only a small problem, I mean all comics/shows and books do little things like that I mean look at the Gregory/Kenneth thing in The Walking Dead. Either way I am really interested in seeing the characters develop and grow more, I have to be honest the plot seemed to go way to fast and felt kind of rushed near the end, like Amy understandably went to find her friend yet Flake seemed irrationally angry, although I am interested in reading the next Issue to see how the series continues I am looking forward to more development as this episode seemed to have very little although that is very common and understandable for the first few episodes/issues as they are usually just introducing the characters.

Robbie
I thought Robbie was  a very good main focus for the series and the opening really intrigued me, I want to see how Jessica's disappearance is going to affect him and I hope we will see some more development between him and Amy. Personally I would love to find out more about his past and more about what happened to his camp and what caused it to fall.

Jessica

I'm really interested in Jessica and hope that she can return as either a zombie and have a really touching scene or have her return either way if done correctly I think will be awesome. I also look forward to seeing her disappearance or death affecting Robbie, I hope that after leaving this new camp (Which I assume they will) they will back-track to find Jessica dead or alive or not there and carry on the unknown status further.

Amy
I'm looking forward to see Amy's character getting developed further, she seems pretty bad-ass so far and I definitely see some chemistry between Amy and Robbie although in my opinion you should have them remain friends for a while and have that grow over time. After reading the first Issue she and Robbie are probably my favorite characters then Zach.

Flake
I am going to be honest, I'm not keen on this character at all and hope we see either a bit of a revamp and improvement or have him killed off early. I felt as though some of his lines were very cliché and cringe worthy and I really found his anger for Amy leaving to be very irrational and unexplainable and then to threaten to kill Zach over it if he didn't deal with it confused me. If it was explained that Flake was worried Amy would lead the undead toward them or worried that someone would follow her but it wasn't, hopefully it will be next issue.

Zach
I have a very bad feeling for this character, although he is pretty cool and he has already started to grow on me if he sticks with Flake he'll be screwed. Personally I hope he either successfully leaves with Amy and Robbie or dies trying although it would be very interesting to see his regret if he didn't leave so it is all pretty open for me, I can't wait to see where his character goes.

Overall Rating
3/10

This may seem low but don't be disheartened or insulted, their was many points I did enjoy but this episode felt short and a the dialogue was a bit unbelievable and then their is Flake...but I'm very open minded and will definitely be checking out the next episode because the way you've left it you have done it so the reader has many reasons to continue such as Jessica's fate and to see if Flake successfully throws them out.