Thread:Hellfire36o/@comment-96.8.11.10-20130222070509

Enjoying the story so far. I'm a fan of High School of The Dead so I can tell where you got the influence from issue 2. I'm glad you've started to deviate away from it because it could have gotten a bit cliche. Good to see Susan back. I hope you continue the story cause it's been about a week. Don't leave us hangin man! LOL oh and a few tips.

1) Remember to edit. Some of it was hard to read because some words were either misspelled or completely missing and I couldn't get exaclty what you meant until I read a second or third time.

2) Seperate the conversations sometimes. For example when one person speaks, put the response to that statemeon on another line. It makes it easier for the reader to know who's talking. Which leads me to

3) Keep the writing style consistent. I see it changed up a bit in the middle of the issues with you now naming who is speaking. Sort of like a script. I know it's tempting to do with all  these characters you have, but it sort of breaks up the flow. Also, some arcs and conflicts were never completely explored. Such as the Aaron/Kim/Chad dynamic. Don't get me wrong, I like how you broke that down and who you gave Aaron, but I think their drama could have been a little more explored especially considering what Kim found out. Just a little something to think about.

I'm thinking of writing a story myself. I'm gonna be sending it to you and the Hope On The Rocks person because you two are my favorite on this site so far. Hope this site becomes more active over time because I'm enjoying the stories. Have a good one. 