Talk:Anguish & Desire/Chapter One/@comment-5910587-20160529221944

OH WOW IM FINALLY LEAVING A COMMENT ON A&G WHAT

So i'll be honest, i didn't know what to expect. I havent read mange/watched much anime in my life but i knew it'd be different than anything else we have here on the wiki. I like how you used the cute lil anime character creator for everyone hehe, they're all so adorable.

You mentioned the first person worries but i think you did a good job with it. Greenie (<3) is a great first person protagonist. His thoughts are funny and adorable and the premise really works for first person. You know, confused protagonist wakes up in odd place. First person means we take the journey and learn with them, so i commend your POV choice!

So like, Greenie. HOW CUTE IS HE THOUGH. When everyone was mistaking him for a girl and he got all embarrassed, I related so hard. He and Yosano are great together, she's my second favorite character after Greenie so far. She seems nice and pure (but we'll see if that changes... :o)

OBINATA A DICK.

My favorite thing about this chapter is the sudden tone shift. We get this cutesy protagonist and this colorful cast of characters at a place literally called HOPE's Peak. This is gonna be fun right?...And then this MonoMech nigga announces the story's true premise and everyone is just... oh, shit. That's how i was anyway. I love how you pulled this off.

One thing I will say is that i felt kind of overwhelmed by the number of characters, but its not a major complaint because i know they'll all get their focus eventually! I really like the story so far Jayme, thanks for bringing something fresh to the wiki :)