Talk:Anguish & Desire/Chapter One/@comment-23785492-20170318183456

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First chapter of a story begins with someone asking for help? Good. Bring the pain. Good things are going to happen.

I see a cute girl has been introduced to the protag, adorable, when does she die?

Protag already lying to the girl about his feelings, this relationship development is being done right i see.

As a british, I am offended by the use of "twat" gawd fitz dis is 2015

Trust the protagonist to notice the bearly acceptable joke before plates on the windows.

Alright so the protag is like all of us after a night of drinking. I dont think he crashed at all, he was drinking and all dis is hallucinations. Already got dis worked out bro.

Protag already got a crush? she'll die, bye bye cute gurl :D

Hold up, none of them checked the desk? K. How were they invited into this school? XD

Wow, they all assumed his gender, what is this 2015? (LOL IM SO FUNNY)

He went off on his own? GDI, dont be like Scooby Doo gang, rule number 1!

So she's cute and motherly? I give her until end of act one. D;

Also greenie feels really racist lmao idk why.

LMAO he called himself a trap, i'm in love.

Oh god another cute gurl, is this going to turn into a battle between two yanderes? (honestly that sounds good so rip protag)


 * 1) relatable when protag recognises a professional killer but says sure to spar anyway

HOLD UP, I was about to joke about now he is assuming genders but you called a fedora stupid? I'm offended and hurt, you should ashamed.

Ok did this screenplayer writer just reveal the plot of the entire story in first episode? :O thats totally something I would do ;)

Also we have the third crush, this is reminding me of a yandere game so rip protag

Also is Kitoaji boy or gurl? you kept saying them :O

I feel like this "last one" is referring to "chosen one", poor protag, too much pressure

Arsnonist? are we sure this isnt a special school in terms of weird not ultimates? XD

Ukon is relatable tbh, probs already dead.

Honestly this physical contact is great, why couldnt i get this kind of love when i looked likea girl in highschool, is it the green hair?

Lmao out of all the people to be in school there had to be someone who sounds like a salesman. XD

Wait so a small person arrives and someone asks is it a monster and thinks of them as thing? wow how rudelmao

MonoMech is adorable villain i hope he wins and lives and has a happy life killing people. :D

Anways, that reaches the end of the chapter, I love it. Especially the ending, I mean I read the overview on the main page so I knew what was going on but having it be actually revealed in the chapter is different and you done it in a way where it still catches me off guard and I get pinned to reading it.

Outside of that i'm not really sure what to comment, No point in reviewing the type of writing and all that you do until I get to more recent chapters and so all I can think of is I have to mention I'm not going to remember everybody, like i'll remember them as they pop up on screen but outside of that lol nope, i'm not good at remembering names such as these, if i'm lucky I can remember like 5-10.

Great chapter though. :D (This comment is probably so long and imma about to see when I post it RIP)